Readers have short attention
spans, so the goal is to draw them into a story quickly. We can hook their
curiosity through the protagonist’s actions and emotions in the moment, and use
the setting, events, and POV observations to awaken the reader’s need-to-know
response. These are good strategies to get us going, but to create real
investment, we need to move readers beyond curiosity. To generate true connection
and empathy, we should show the protagonist’s inner struggles, especially those
moments that touch the deepest parts of their selves and reveal who they are by
how they resolve personal turmoil.
Moment of struggle where a
character’s beliefs and values conflict or contradict are especially
important to show. Consider these:
·
Leo discovers a secret about a
family member that is both shocking and harmful. Should he go to the police, or
stay silent? (Family loyalty vs. justice)
·
At her university graduation,
Darma is at a crossroads. Her parents expect her come work in the family
business, but she knows that won’t make her happy. Should she do what is
expected of her, or chart her own course? (Duty vs. freedom and self-fulfillment)
·
Jim’s old friend Steve is in town,
and two days into the visit, he asks for a favor: to lie for him. Steve’s
worried about his crazy-jealous wife discovering he had coffee with an old high
school flame the day before. If she finds out Steve wasn’t with Jim all day as
he told her, she’ll send her mob-connected brothers after him. This situation
seems fishy and Jim is an honest person by nature, but Steve’s invoking the bro
code. (Friendship vs. honesty)
In each case, the character’s beliefs and core
values are clashing, and it’s causing them internal tension. There’s a term for
psychological discomfort caused by these contradicting thoughts, perceptions,
values, or beliefs: cognitive dissonance.
Inner conflict, and the dissonance
at the root of it is compelling to readers because these things are
true-to-life. Readers know what it’s like to wrestle with difficult situations
and the pain of not knowing what to do.
In these moments, a character experiences
negative emotions, possibly guilt, worry, confusion, defeat, shame, and the
like, and may question their own value and strength. If their emotional
discomfort is strong enough, they may try to run from their problems and
difficult decisions rather than deal with them. Readers understand this too. Avoidance
is a pretty common coping strategy when a person feels overwhelmed or unequipped
to handle the challenge before them.
Can you see how reminding readers
of their own personal experiences makes them feel connected and involved? By
seeing a character go through something they know themselves, they come to care
about the character and what happens next.
Tip: Don’t Leave Inner Conflict
Unresolved
Characters running from their
problems might be true-to-life, but if we don’t reverse that the pace will stall,
and we’ll lose our grip on the reader’s interest. An emotion amplifier can
help us get things back on track.
Emotion amplifiers are an added
condition or situational burden that a character must cope with on top of
everything else. They’re a challenge, conflict, and emotional destabilizer
rolled into one, capable of causing physical, cognitive, and psychological
discomfort. Like adding weight to an already overloaded cart, the strain can
become too much, and the character breaks like a cart’s wheel.
Pressure, pain,
exhaustion, scrutiny, danger—these and other amplifiers have the power to intensify
a character’s emotional state, making them reactive. If they lose control of
their emotions they might lash out, act with poor judgement, and make a
mistake. Not only does generate conflict, but it also resonates with readers
who have also lost control and then had to clean up the fallout.
Reminding readers of the real
world is always a good strategy for engagement, but anything that touches their
emotions will be especially powerful.
If you’d like to learn more, check out The
Emotion Amplifier Thesaurus: A Writer’s Guide to Character Stress and
Volatility. To see a full list of amplifiers
you might like to use in your story, go
here.
Angela Ackerman is a story coach,
international speaker, and co-author of the bestselling book, The Emotion Thesaurus: A Writer’s Guide to Character Expression, and its many sequels. To date, this series has sold over a
million copies.
Angela is also the
co-founder of the popular site Writers Helping Writers®, as well as One Stop for Writers®, a portal to game-changing tools and
resources that enable writers to craft powerful fiction. Find her on Facebook, Twitter, and Instagram.